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Chapter 11:
A Surprise Entrance

The group of ninja were walking along the path, each lost in their own thoughts, save for Shikamaru and Kiba, who were talking back and forth about Kiba’s latest involvement with “troublesome” women. Shino walked along silently behind them. Every once in a while he would be greeted by one of his bugs, who were busily scouting the area ahead for any signs of the caravan, or enemies. Naruto plodded along, hands in his pockets, thinking about the past few days. He was tailed by a very irate-looking Akamaru, who, in order to vent his frustrations, began to trot around the group taking passing snaps at butterflies who were lazily flying about. This prompted giggles from the final member of the mixed squad, Hinata. She spent most of her time blushing slightly, and staring at the back of Naruto’s head. Every once in a while, she would activate her Byakugan and scan the surrounding area.

“There’s a stream up ahead.” called Hinata.

Shikamaru looked at her, and she nodded to him. “Then we’ll set up camp off to the side.” He indicated off to the right with a hand motion.


Naruto had finished gathering the firewood he was told to get and started back towards the camp. The sun wasn’t too close to setting yet, so he could afford to nap for an hour or so. He dropped the bundle of logs to the ground and took place up against a tree a few feet away. Within a few minutes, the thoughts in his head quieted down to a dull roar, and sleep overtook him.


Naruto awoke to the sound of scratching. It was coming from a bush behind him. One second and two spent Kunai later, a field mouse scurried past him into the clearing. He had a front row ticket to a battle; or, to put it in better context, a slaughter.

CLICK! CLICK! Two ants were gone. Another few clicks, another few ants swallowed. Naruto watched silently as a few more field mice appeared and engaged in the same activity.  Probably brothers and sisters … Naruto thought.

Some minutes later, the ant trail had all but disappeared, and the engorged mice sauntered off into the grass, save one. It was slightly thinner, and had one eye missing. It caught the few remaining stragglers with ease, but was halted by a sudden sound. Naruto heard it. A wasp flew lazily into view. On such a warm day, such a wasp would be helping chew wood into paper for its nest, but this wasp didn’t want wood. It wanted the mouse.

Within the tiny, yet very sensitive ears, the mouse could clearly hear the wasp hovering a few inches away. It leapt, gnashing its teeth together, hoping to taste the succulent wasp meat. But, its hopes were dashed against a rock as the wasp nimbly dodged it. Sensing the wasp coming in for an attack, the mouse skipped a pace away, barely missing the barb coming within millimeters of its fur. This duet lasted for several minutes, before the mouse, hungry and out of energy from emaciation, couldn’t dodge quickly enough. The wasp landed upon the mouse; gripping its fur tightly, it thrusted its spike into the mouse’s back. A tiny squeak of pain later, the wasp detached itself and flew off.

However it did not get far. It was met in midair with a large beetle. And then another, and another. Then ten, and another ten, until the wasp disappeared inside a veritable swarm of beetles, as did the mouse. The beetles receded, leaving an empty husk of a wasp, and a tiny, eviscerated mouse.

Naruto knew those bugs preceded Shino, and waited for him to make his entry.

“Despicable creature...” Shino stepped into view on Naruto’s right. “That certain type of wasp doesn’t carry a stinger with poison. Instead, it lands on its victim, usually societal animals, and injects them with eggs. The mouse, thinking its been injured goes back to its burrow to lick its wounds, unknowingly bringing a payload of death.” He scooped out a trough of dirt with his hands. “The initial host usually dies within three to four days.” He placed the mouse in the trench and buried it. “But, not before being torn open and the parasites to find a new body to invade, until they have grown into adult wasps, usually killing around a dozen creatures apiece.

“Using that poor beast to unknowingly corrupt and destroy its brother and sisters…” Naruto said to no one in particular. He looked up at Shino, and then rose to his feet. He picked up the firewood, noticing the sky had grown much darker. “Thank you Shino…” he said, shifting the bundle in his arms and strolled off towards their camp.


Naruto entered the clearing where his comrades sat, waiting for him. He dropped the wood next to the already going fire. Hinata breathed a sigh of relief when she saw Naruto uninjured.

“About time…” Kiba huffed.

“I…had a lot to think about.” Naruto answered their unasked questions, “Shino gave me even more to think about.” He looked at them with sullen eyes. “I’m sorry if I worried you.” He sat down looking straight into the fire as if it held every answer to every question he had.

“Don’t worry Naruto-kun, as long as you’re okay.” She blushed and put a caring hand on his shoulder.

He halfway turned to her and smiled, causing one of Shikamaru’s eyebrows to rise.

“I’m going to bed.” Naruto stood up.

Everyone looked at him as if he just said he could fly.

“Without dinner?” Kiba asked.

He paused for a moment while opening the tent flap. “I lost my appetite back in the forest.” And then he disappeared.

They looked at each other speechless, and then to Shino as he walked into sight as if nothing were wrong. “What did you DO to him?” Kiba asked.

“I found him watching a couple of animals fight.” Shino sat down, and related to them what had happened, unaware of the silent tears falling out of Naruto’s eyes ten feet away.


Naruto awoke to blackness. He tried to pull his eyes open, but all the crying the night before had left the salt in his tears to dry his eyelashes together. He channeled chakra into his ears, making them more sensitive than before. He could hear the two humans and one dog sleeping beside him. He sat up, but this movement caused Kiba to shift and Akamaru to raise his head and look at him.

“Sssh…” he put a finger to his lips, “I’m going to the stream to wash my face.” He whispered to the dog.

Akamaru put his head back down and Naruto stole out of the tent. Slowly and silently, he made his way to the gurgling off to his right. He used the sound of the stream to navigate and maneuver his way in between the trees, causing a flashback:

“Doton: Tsuchi Ayatsuri no jutsu (Earth Release: Earth Manipulation Jutsu)”

Naruto covered his eyes with a bandana as Takashi positioned himself on the far side of the maze of earthen posts he had just created.

“Follow the sound of my voice…”

Naruto concentrated, cocking his head to one side, so that his ear was towards his teacher. He smacked into the first pole. Rubbing his ear, he tried again with the same result.

“Picture in your mind, as if you were using your sight…”

Naruto tried to forma a picture in his mind. Another pole met his temple.

Takashi sighed, “If you can’t do it normally, then channel chakra into your ears.”

Naruto funneled chakra into his ears. After the initial burning sensation of pushing chakra through passageways that had not been built up yet had passed, he suddenly got a picture in his mind. Black posts on a green background. He decided that the black posts, were the earthen ones. He slowly weaved his way in and out of them.

“You’re getting it.” Takashi said, the sound making everything in Naruto’s mind become a crisp and clear image. When his voice died away, so did the picture somewhat; it became blurry and distorted. Resorting to the background noise, and focusing on it, he was able to get a better image. Arriving in the center of the maze, he found out that he couldn’t “see” much of anything anymore. The posts had absorbed most of the sound. The only thing he could “see,” was the tops.
I’ll just walk across the top.</i> He had thought to himself. With that thought Naruto leaded up and gracefully landed atop one of the posts. Within thirty second he was on the ground, taking off his bandana, and looking at a smiling Takashi.

“That’s enough for now. You are a quick learner. You didn’t completely finish the exercise, but you got to the end in half the time it usually takes my students.”

“Hey! Who were your other students!!!!????” yelled Naruto, eager to hear of his teachers exploits. However Takashi’s face became stone and he walked away silently.

It was that night that Takashi had shown Naruto the scratched Hita-Ite. It was that night when Takashi had told the story of his pupils, and how he had once been a Jounin teacher for the Village Hidden in the Mist. It was that night that he told Naruto of his pupil, and of Zabuza.
So Naruto walked, his chakra-charged ears picking up anything and everything. Within five minutes he was at the stream. He located it very easily, seeing as how it made a lot of noise. So much so, that he had to shut off his extra hearing, and use his normal hearing. He squatted down, splashing water onto his face and rubbing it into his eyes, trying to dissolve the salt that glued them together. Slowly he wedged his eyes open.

As the world finally came into focus, he looked in the water at his reflection. He saw bags under his eyes. Those eyes that looked almost nothing like the ones that were once shining with his…“passion of youth…” That’s when he noticed something strange. Peering deeper into the water, he saw something circling him high up in the air. “Hm?” he turned his head around and craned his next to look up. Sure enough there was a very large white bird circling above him. He squinted, barely able to see it in the morning light. Then he noticed something else odd. He was not alone. He slowly turned his head and eyes to lock onto those of his pale-eyed teammate.

She sat there in the stream, trying to cover “herself” up, with her arms covering up as much as possible, and her body sinking as low into the water as she could. But, she started wide-eyed at Naruto, red as can be, and shaking so much she was cause the water to ripple around her.


Naruto’s mind stopped. All the tiny Narutos suddenly dropped their boxes and stared up at the screen of what Naruto was actually seeing. The stood, eyes wide and mouth agape, until finally one had the sense to run to his “Fight or Flight” controls, and mashed the “Flight” button.

They were frozen in the place for a good thirty seconds, silently staring at each other. Naruto finally stammered out a shaky “Sorry…” ad then disappeared in a plume of dust.


Hinata’s brain was in overload as well. After Naruto left she blacked out, only to wake a second later when her head hit the water.

“N-N-N-N-Narut-t-t-t-t….” she couldn’t even finish his name.

Somewhere in the back of her mind a small Brave Hinata was whooping for joy. However, the large Shy Hinata just pushed her into a locked closet, and continued to stare out of Hinata’s eyes.

It was a good ten minutes before she got out of the stream; of course using her Byakugan to keep a lookout for anyone coming near.

She arrived back at camp with everyone sitting around the embers, eating breakfast. Kiba and Akamaru were talking and yipping back and forth, completely oblivious to what had transpired a few minutes ago. Shikamaru laid on his back shoving food into his mouth while watching the clouds roll on by. Shino just sat there, sunglasses always staring forward. And then Naruto, with an almost full plate of food next to him, was staring into the fire as he had been doing lately for the past few days.

She grabbed some of her food, and sat a few feet away from Naruto. If he knew she was there, he was doing a great job of hiding it. The tension was so thick; one could cut it with a Kunai.

Finally after a breakfast of silence they packed their stuff and left northward again. Neither of the two even made eye contact for the rest of the day.


It was late in the evening a few days later, when they came upon a large gathering.

“What the hell is this, her entire village?” Kiba yelled.

“Halt! Stand and be recognized!”

Taking the role of foreign dignitary, Shikamaru took a step forward. “Greetings. My name is Nara Shikamaru.” He indicated himself, and then his comrades, “These are my comrades, Uzumaki Naruto, Hyuuga Hinata, Inuzuka Kiba and his dog Akamaru, and Aburame Shino.” He handed the guard their official mission document.

After giving the mission document a good once over, and then a curt nod, they headed into the large camp. “Get settled in; then come find me, and I’ll take you to the princess’s quarters.”


They entered the monster of a tent in which the princess lived, and gaped in awe. All manner of blue, green, and gold, festooned the walls. There had to be about twenty people; servants and guards, and then a white curtain; behind which sat the princess. There was a long table off to one side, with dozens of dishes and drinks. Akamaru and Kiba were already drooling and ogling at the food.

“These are the Konoha Shinobi your father hired to protect you princess.”

“Hmph…” came a tiny voice from the other side of the curtain. “…A waste of my time and money, if you ask me. I already have dozens of guards and servants at my beck and call.”

Shikamaru could see Naruto seething next to him, glaring at her silhouette and clenching and unclenching his fists. Easy Naruto… he thought to himself.

“So much food….” Kiba whispered to himself as he and Akamaru both licked their chops in unison.

“Don’t touch any of that! That’s MY food!”

“All of it…?” Kiba whined

“Of course not, what do you think I am, fat? Whatever I don’t eat will be thrown away.” Akamaru whined and his tail drooped low. “You may leave.” The silhouette waved them off.

Shikamaru heard a low growl being issued from his right, but not from Akamaru. He looked over to see a seething Naruto. The red wisps of chakra were already starting to roll off of him, and his eyes had turned as red as they can get, at least until Hinata had sensed this too and put a hand on his arm and said his name softly. He looked at her, the redness fading; he stomped out of the tent leaving his teammates and a dozen guards sweating quite profusely. It was understandable. The older ones were in Konoha when Kyuubi attacked, and the ones who could sense chakra, knew this certain chakra. A few sank to their knees as they felt the chakra recede, thanking whatever gods they worshipped. Even the princess could feel the pressure in the back of her mind, untrained as she is. Shikamaru even saw Shino’s eye twitch a few times.

“You don’t understand how lucky you are that we’re here to protect you. You don’t have to like us,” Kiba walked up the step to the curtain, ignoring the pleas of the guards, he ripped it down, revealing a stunningly beautiful blonde-haired, blue-eyed girl behind it, “…but, you sure as hell are going to respect us.” He spat out.

She nodded dumbly, and they exited the tent.


When they got to the two tents, they saw Naruto’s battle gear lying in a neat pile next to the fire with his Hita-Ite displayed openly on top.

“I’ll go find him.” Shino offered.

Shikamaru nodded, “Then we’ll eat and go to sleep.”

Hinata set up her things inside her tent worrying about Naruto.


Naruto wandered through the camp blowing off some stem. He knew he was extremely close to losing it on her. He wasn’t close to completely losing like he had twice with Takashi, but he sure as hell would have given her a large piece of his mind.

He was walking until he came upon a semi-circle of all sorts of cages. But what drew his attention was the largest cage off to the left. He slowly walked up to it his eyes locked with the snow-white tiger’s. All at once he could feel all of the sadness and loneliness that the tiger had felt all of its life.

“Hey! You’d better be careful!” a man yelled to him as he jogged up. He motioned to the tiger with an iron rod, “He’ll take your face clean off if ye give him the chance.” He turned his attention to the tiger, “Hey! You weren’t buggin’ this guy were ye?” he raked the bars with the rod in his hand. “Mangy beast…” he raised his arm back, only to have his wrist engulfed by Naruto’s hand. Naruto applied a little pressure and snapped the man’s wrist.

The man yelled, a stream of curse words leaving his mouth, “What did ye do that for?” he cried as he cradled his arm. A crowd had started to gather.

Naruto didn’t even look at him. He just stared directly at the tiger’s eyes. “You had better get that looked at. Go to my tent, you’ll find a blue-haired girl. Tell her everything that happened, and she’ll fix your arm.” He approached the bars putting his hands around them.

“W-what are you doing?” the man yelled hysterically.

Naruto ignored him. He was spellbound by those eyes; he bended the bars outward creating a hole for the tiger to exit out of. People were staring wide-eyed at this strange man for two reasons: he was bending steel bars with naught but his hands; and he was freeing some strange animal; a deadly one.”

“I know this isn’t your home, but go; be free.” He said softly to the tiger, who growled softly in return and trotted off into the trees.

“I will not stand for this!” the man cried out.

Naruto lowered his head until his nose was almost touching the man’s. He glared straight into the beady eyes, “I don’t think that you’re in a position to stop me. You had better hope we don’t cross paths again; as far as I’m concerned, you’re lower than pond scum.”

Naruto left and stalked back to the dual tents, and sat down on his mat, which was rolled up and waiting for him to use it. Hinata looked at him, “Naruto-kun…I think…we have to…talk.”

He looked at her with pained eyes, “Please, not tonight. Can we talk tomorrow?”

She half-sighed, half-smiled, “Of course.”

Naruto thanked her and went into his tent. Using the roll as a pillow, he fell asleep instantly.


Morning came too early. By the time Naruto awoke, most of the camp was lined up in the caravan. Within the hour, everyone was ready to leave.

Hinata up front, Naruto a few yards back, Shikamaru behind him, Shino, and then Kiba and Akamaru bringing up the rear.

Around noon they took a break, bringing the caravan to a halt. Since Hinata was up front scanning with her Byakugan for traps and enemies, Naruto had to go up to see her.

He found her around a bend about fifty yards ahead of the caravan.

“You know, you shouldn’t be alone like this.”  She jumped at the sound of his voice.

“Ano…I’m sorry…”

He shook his head, “Don’t be. You were right last night we DO need to talk. About earlier that day, and about yesterday morning.”

She blushed at the mention of the incident, “You’re right, I should have told someone I was going to take a bath. It was just so early, I thought no one would be awake.”

“I probably wouldn’t have if I hadn’t…hadn’t been crying the night before.” He looked off into he forest and missed her eyes widen. “I’m going to leave soon.” Her eyes got even wider. “After this mission I’m leaving, maybe for good. I have some unfinished business to take care of.”


“No…” he shook his head, “Sasuke can rot for all I care. He’s not my brother anymore. My brother died when he left me to become the very thing that he despised most.” He shook his head again, “No. There are larger things than Sasuke and the Akatsuki.

“What could be worse than them?”

“I…I can’t tell you…” he could feel the presence get depressed. “But about yesterday morning…” his stomach clenched, “I realized that I’d developed feelings for you…”


Shy Hinata shrunk a little bit, and the door burst open via a Brave Hinata’s kick; biting her nails watching to see what would happen next.


“…but, that’s why I have to leave. Like I said a while back, I can’t let anyone into my heart again. Anyone who gets too close is destined to die a gruesome fate.” She was on the verge of tears. “I wish I had realized your feelings a few years ago when it could have made a difference. I’m sorry…” he turned around and took a step towards the caravan.

Hinata fought through her tears. “Who are you…?

He turned around “Hm?”

“Y-you’re not the same Naruto-kun I admired when you left four years ago. What changed you? Tell me…”

He sighed, knowing that he had to tell her. “You aren’t going to make this easy for me are you?” she shook her head. He knelt on the ground, and she mirrored him, her knees inches from his, her eyes looking pleadingly into Naruto’s. “It started after Jiraya died-“

“OKAY! That’s enough of that! I thought there was going to be some kissing going on! Who doesn’t like a bit of a sappy love tragedy?” a voice called out from the trees.

“About time you showed yourself…” Naruto stated.

A figure leapt out of the treetops and landed of the road in front of them; clad in a simple green robe, with a black rope belt. Purple eyes stared out from under the hood hungrily.

“Oh so you noticed me? I guess I should have known that I couldn’t slip by the all mighty Number Three.”

“Number Three…?” Hinata asked.

“Oh right. I forgot our dear sweet Naruto-Kun’s girly-friend. Yeah, he was about to tell you all about it wasn’t he? Don’t worry, I’ll tell you all about it once I’ve killed him.” He smiled revealing gnarly yellow teeth.

“Are you under orders?” Naruto asked.

“No, but they’ll reward me highly for bringing the head of a traitor; probably with your position.”

“I guess it never did settle well with you that I moved up to Number Three in two years, when you’ve been Number six for fifteen.” He turned his head to look at Hinata. “Activate you’re Byakugan. Remember my Kaze no Rokujūyon Hira (64 Hands of Wind)?

The figure interjected, “OH so this girl is a Hyuuga? She was going to replace my partner, Number Seven? Fitting, yet ironic; to replace a Hyuuga with another Hyuuga.”

“Enough. You know I hate banter and explanations. However, I am about to show Hinata the full potential of my Kaze no Rokujūyon Hira (64 Hands of Wind).

The figure smiled again, “Very well. Let’s proceed.”

Naruto motioned forward as he motioned for Hinata to back away from him. “Your move, pawn.” he injected as much venom into the last word as possible, knowing it would play on Number six’s hatred of being used. He grinned.
here's chapter 11


Chapter 10:[link]
Chapter 12: ETA 27,28-June-2007
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FairskyAngel Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
.. that was some odd confession from Naruto.. o.o
ryuninjashenron Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2009
chapter 12 was scheduled for june 27/28 yet its september 2009 now and no chapter 12
napalmjoe88 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2009
there is another chapter. actually, the story is already completed. i just got lazy and didn't put a link to the next chapter in the comment box.
redbirds003 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
Sooo.. Where`s the other chapter to the story?! Is it complete like you said? Is it linked to another site or something?!
trewill91 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2015
go to his gallery, or look at the related items to the right of the story at the very beginning of the chapter
Big-smexy Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2009
please get to the next chapter the suspense is killing me!
minicoopermaverick Featured By Owner May 30, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
TheWodenite Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2009
It's been several months. Gve me a new chapter.
ANIMEFREAK-DRACANIA Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2008
Just purely gripping, i bet hinata's thinking, 'another hyuuga?!' lol
naruto seems so different; cold and yet still strong.
nattiethefoxy90 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
WOW! awesome story! looks like theres gonna be a fight! i wonder what will happen next. whens the next chapter?
napalmjoe88 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2008
keep looking in my gallery, you'll find the next chapter there, i posted it over a year ago
LittleMissReality Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
missmybcmiyuki Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2008  Hobbyist
LOL embarassing as it was for them, i can't help but laugh a little.

then all of a sudden naruto realizes he might have feelings for her after seeing her naked!
but what's this, is he planning to make her join his mysterious group.

it's bugging me that i don't know much a bout them.

but it seems like there's gonna be a fight, i wonder what will happen next!?
QTcutie11 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2008  Student General Artist
Wow, you write great! Sorry I didn't reply on your other chapters, I just joined the party ^^ Ilove it though! Keep it up <3
Athirae Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
i like it so much u did a great job writing it...a little confusing but good
napalmjoe88 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2008
yea sorry. I know it's a little confusing, but i kinda write around things and tend gto drop subtle hints about what's really going on, and then explain it about 4 chapters later.
Athirae Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
sokay its actually really good im a NaruxHina(?) fan so its really good keep it up
napalmjoe88 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2008
thanks, and i will
drakonnelvra Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008
Hell yeah!! go, brave Hinata!!
link44134 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2008
when is the next chapter gonna happen
budy23 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2007
Your story is one of the best fanfic I have read. Hope the next chapter come sone
napalmjoe88 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2007
i've sent it off for beta-read two days ago, and he's working on it so expect it in the the next few dyas.
Omegahokage Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2007
muuust read next chapt now! i was hoping it would at least be until chapt 15 till i was caught up whaaaaa, because i love this story
Mahq Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2007
pls, post the next chapter, i cant wait :D
daimyosam2 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2007
the new naruto kicks some serious ass but i hope the old naruto starts to resurface
Oathkeeper-Ryu Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2007
more now please. PLEASE!
napalmjoe88 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2007
it's a very integral chapter. I have to make sure it's just right.
Hinata--Hime Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2007
Dish ish so gut! *luffs and adds to favorites*
goatis Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2007
Well, this is just starting to get interesting, it was a bit hard to force myself to read it all the way through due to the fact that I've read "Two Halves" and that story is so much better written, it seems like you've really hurried this story. And I even waited several weeks and read lots of fanfics in between reading the other and this one just to get "Two Halves" out of my system. There are a lot of grammar errors and sentence structure issues when there weren't in the other story, it's just not up to the same caliber of writing as your last work. The story line is really interesting especially since things are finally moving but it's slow/hard to read when your reading it with all the errors I pointed out...Please go back and edit these chapters when you have the time, I think the story would be spectacular but right now it's just a pleasant distraction. And I'm still hoping for a sequel to "Two Halves" but I'm willing to wait for quality rather than quantity!
Hinata--Hime Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2007
Michael didn't write Two Halves...
goatis Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2007
Well, that certainly explains the totally different writing style!
Hinata--Hime Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2007
ledfan Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
yay now we know who takashi is :D (well somewhat at least) and next time the explanation CANT WAIT :D
andreaco28 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
FIGHT FIGHT FIGHT ok you can tell im liking this, a lot, very nice and the plot and the new view of naruto is very interesting.... beginning to wait 4 next chapter
Jack-Pyro Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
Hooray, I'm Still on edge, I cant wait for next chappie. Write Write like the wind!
Rhunter42dragon Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
Finally, the explantion! I can't wait! Does Naruto actually think he's going to be able to leave? It seems pretty obvious to me that if Hinata can't convince him to stay, she'll just cash in favor #1 and make him stay. Anyway, great work as always can't wait for the next one.
UnchosenOne Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
cutecartoon Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
that was so amazing! i can't wait for more!
spudrow2005 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
very nice napalm i cant wait to see what happens next, keep it coming
k2e Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
alright huge fight can't wait
napalmjoe88 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
alright...don't get your hopes up. He's just a lackey. Naruto is #3 and this guy is #6. The fight is gonna be fairly quick; less than 500 words. Though you'll get a thorough explanation of what Naruto has gotten himself into in the next chapter.
k2e Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
still can't wait
Celeris Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
yay for Hinata!.....i think.......
rikuhasownage Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
Awesome huge fight gonna start soon!
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